Will she come ?- IV

Its already 10 minutes..why is she not here…I have my heart saying that she will be here..This three hours of wait have been tremendously hard for me. Waiting each second to pass, everytime my eye on this watch, because I want the time to pass fast. So, fast that it could be the time when she will come. She will come I know. Even if its hard to pass this moment, hard to breathe like this in her wait, in her wait. Everyone look so much happy, but here I am with this weary heart, desperate, damn too desperate to see her..to look at her..to find her here..

I know how much I was scared even to invite her here. If she had refused, I would never hav the chance to wait her. Waiting her is also a satisfaction. I know she will come. She will come.

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Hello ! where are you ? I am at the gate..come fast…….

(Oh dear ! she is here…she is here…why am I biting my nails…oh this heart is beating faster…even more faster…shit..I must not run..people will know…hey I have not answered her..)

Hellllloooooooo !!!!!!

Yeah..hello…(hehe)..I am here…I am coming…u stay there..

She is finally here….

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She is looking beautiful as always..without wearing Kurti as she had desired..she is there in her formal dress…but she is as charming as she is…she here my heart is..here…today I will tell her…tell her what…that how much she kept me waiting..( is this what I want to say). Leave it.

She is here finally. My wait is over..She the one whom I have been waiting for a long time..She is the one..who is finally here..with her simplicity and all..She looks beautiful although she has not doen make ups as she had aspired. She came for me I know, because I have called her, she came here directly from her work. In this night..this night..when I am so despeerate as never before.

She is finally here. Here, my goodness, here…would I be able to tell her that ….( tell her what ?)  ………..

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I have loved her unknowingly…since the day we talked…She was so friendly, child like…like a cute doll..I have always cherished the moment we had spend together..DAMN she calls me her friend…this sucks…I love her like nothing …love her more than anything but she..why she calls me friend…

Would I be able to tell her that how much I love her..would I be able to tell the world that this is the girl whom I have loved..this is she for whom my heart beats..my heart palpitates..every moment I think of her.

Here for three hours I was so uch desperate and waited her like nothing …I waited her because I love her…I waited her..becasue she is the one..she is the only one …whom I gave my heart…she is the one…who has my soul within her…

Will I be able to tell her this…….that how much I love her…

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5 Responses

  1. Curosity kills the cat bhaneko yehi ho…suspense create garyo garyo ani last maa kehi chaina… 😦 ending seemed a little flat to me in comparison to the hype u had created in the beginning and throughout the story…

    Waiting for your new story now…its gud to read ur stories…

  2. Like the ending…
    It drives the readers to think further…in their own way.. You have concluded the story but the quest remains in readers mind…what will happen next….???..Well, everybody will think their own way….
    Keep writing…. 🙂

  3. Its well, up to the readers that they need to assume what will happen next….
    I was trying to potray a mans feeling for a woman…how he feels like…the storys plot is of just three – four hours…its abotu the e\feelings and emotions….
    Well, I am also not fully satisfied with the ending..

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  5. Hey ending is not as your previous stories. i was waiting for something intresting but this is just a teenage story. as you think a man’s feelings can be this much only? and what about a girl or women will feel in the same case? keep thinking and writing.
    nice work anyway.

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