Off late…I am posting a story….just I remembered that I used to create stories…that seem so real….LOL
…………………………( depicting a mind after a decision )
I don’t possess any value in your life now. I know that because it is me who abandon you for no reason at all. But it was a decision ,a decision for life time.
I remember the first day I saw you, I remember everything…you were crush that time. I remember your talk…your moody attitude….your jealous smile….everything I remember. The first talk about your Pulsar 200 ( which was in fashion then ). I remember everything dear.
I know you do not remember anything, I wonder do you remember my full name too?….this makes me embarrass…..why after all I had chosen you as the first ever relationship…that gave me such a horrible attitude about all of men …..I am scared now….Are you from Mars..dear?
Love, that had let us decide about moving ahead together in life….now is the craziest thought I would ever believe. I have lost beliefs on love..that is a filthy thing now…I have no emotions left now…I have nothing like the feeling of love….
I remember those…50 smses …I deleted that night….the calls….and all…I remember you calling me 3 in the morning…when I gave you a miss call because I dream of you…that was so funny..(dear)…Why should I call you dear…you are never dear…You have hurt so bad….
Those cups of coffee..and the soups…I remember how you used to insist me…that the thing you are eating is so much tasty..than the thing I am holding in my mug…..
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But I remember you as the one..who tortured me for being ambitious..I remember you for pressurizing me…for not picking your phone..because I was busy….I remember you that you wrote a break up text…just because I was so busy not to pick up your phone. Ridiculous….You hurt me so hard…with your drunk voice that night…What you told you will abduct me….Funny…
I remember how..heart used to palpitate…when you used to call…those long hours and hours of call…Oh I miss them…those continuous typing of sms…I miss them…I don’t have any one to call me now…no one who will sms…such sweet text…all grammar zero..and all spelling mistake….I ignored them…sometimes it used to be so hard to understand your text…
I remember you never let me pay the bills…..that was your superiority over me…the balances you used to provide….which I never wanted…You made me so depended upon you and left me like nothing.
You were after me I know…you were…after me…I know….that was never love…you never loved me for what I am…because you never respected me…you wanted…a wife…a homely wife…who will be your servant…I was never like that….you wanted a…wife..to sleep with you…and never speak a word…you never wanted me to succeed because you wanted to succeed over me….
You torture me always…for being ambitious..you laughed out loud when i told you about my ambitions…about my dreams and about everything that I wanted…you wanted me to listen you always…and never want me to speak out…
Huh ! What did you said “I love you” , “I can’t live without you”…
Shit people like you never deserve my genuine love…I felt better after boycotting you from my life…Listen me I hate you….
I am never going to regret over my decision….and I am never going to believe in love….
Filed under: Sweta's Fiction Corner | Tagged: emotions, feelings, hate, love, Story
sweta, it is great…. serious at some points…… i also laugh out loud at some…. it’s nice though…. like you have written in mood…. hehe…. nice piece….. keep it up
Well, I must say it’s a nice story and every word has deep meaning. It has been expressed so nicely that it feels like real…It’s a story but feels like writer has gone through this situation and suffered lot, I must salute her decision…
जे हुन्छ राम्रै हुन्छ भन्ने मान्यता राख्नु नै, सबै भन्दा बुद्दिमानी हुन्छ अनि बितेको कुरा बारम्बार दिमाग मा आइरह्यो भने, इमोशनल अत्याचार हुन्छ ! आफ्नो लागि आफुले डिसिजन गर्ने हो, आफ्नो स्वतन्त्रता आफैँले उपयोग गर्ने हो । सबै कुरा पैसाले किन्न सकिँदैन भन्ने कुरा पनि यो कथा ले छर्लङ्ग पारेको छ । प्रेम बिर्सन, कथा को पात्र लाई सहज त पक्कै नहोला तर पनि प्रयास गर्ने हो भने, गर्न नसक्ने कुरा केही छैन ।
पल्सर २०० देखि सुरु भएर कथा, मेरो डिसिजन ठिक छ भन्ने मा पुगेर टुंगिएको छ, यसले यही पैसा र प्रेमलाई ईंगित गरेको जस्तो लाग्छ । हुन त, कथा को मर्म कस्तो हो भन्ने कुरा त लेख्नेलाई मात्र थाहा हुन्छ तर मेरो बिचार मा त पैसा र प्रेम नै जोडिएको छ । पैसा ले सबै कुरा किन्न सकिन्छ भन्ने उसको मान्यता रहेको देखिन्छ तर यो बुझ्ने मान्छेलाई पच्ने कुरा त पक्कै हैन, अत: कथा मा लिइएको निर्णयलाई एकदम जायज ठहर्याउन सकिन्छ ।
हुन त फेरी मन परेपछि, कसैको केही लाग्दैन । कथा मा नि त्यो कुरा पढ्दा चाँहि खुब हाँसो उठ्यो, त्यही एसएमएस को कुरा ! हाहाहा ! तर पछि फेरी त्यही एसएमएस बाट नै ब्रेकअप भयो भन्ने बुझिन्छ कथाबाट !
“I love you” , “I can’t live without you” भन्ने कुरा ले अलिअलि भ्रम पनि पारेको छ, माया गरेको मान्छे बिना बाँच्न सक्दिन भन्नु त ठिकै नै हो, त्यो त सायद आफ्नोपन जताउनलाई, घुर्क्याउनलाई पनि गरिएको थियो होला ! तर पनि भन्न चाँहि अलि बढि नै भनेको हो, उसले पनि ! पहिलो “I love you” , ले पहिले गरिएको कुरा जनाउँथ्यो होला अनि “I can’t live without you” भन्ने कुरा ले चाँहि पछि को स्थिति जनाउँछ जस्तो छ, कारण यहाँ ब्रेकअप भइसकेको छ ।
कथा मा प्रयुक्त भावना ले, नजाने कहाँ कहाँ मुटु को तार हल्लाइदिएको छ । यस्तो पनि हुन्छ भनेजस्तो, जो सँग पहिले केही दिनसम्म एकछिन पनि नछाडौँ जस्तो लाग्ने तर फेरी पलभर मै यस्तो पनि हुने… यस्तो कुरा सुन्दा अनि पढ्दा मलाई डल्स हाउस (पुतलीको घर) को यो कुरा(A person ever turns to be a strange within a fraction of second…and there is reason behind…) सँधै याद आउँछ । अनि लाग्छ, केही कारण त पक्कै हुन्छ । जुनसुकै कुरा को पछाडि पनि केही कुरा लुकेको हुन्छ ।
After reading this story, I’ve tried to summarize this in my way, dun know, in what sense this story has been written. But I must say, decision is good enough for dignity and freedom.We are free to do anything, we want. And no-one have control over us… Hope to read story in future as well but that story must have hope hai…story without argument, story without frustration…story must have hope… But this story too has hope… as writer has done a right decision to make her life beautiful and more colorful… Keep it up dear
The only word I have on my mind after reading this is “WOW!” And yes, it’s your life, so the freedom should be yours too…Proud to learn about your decision di!
nice reply there from Akar. yeah, i too liked the character’s expression of feelings.. the feelings that really touch anyone’s heart…specially to those who have been through it. The plot is good and the expressions are marvelous. She is trying to be hopeful but she herself does not try to hope. The last sentence “.and I am never going to believe in love….” gives some pessimistic view of her life. Ending pessimistically, is not what i wanted. There sud have been renewed hopes of love. How will u live without believing in love? It is essential. May be she sud see love through another angle now.
Well my analysis is solely my analysis, ur story being great in every respect.
Loved it…. Nice story and smooth write up, enjoyed reading it… Well it happens in life. Ppl whom we think can’t live without becomes so far and we become helpless…… ! Keep the hope though…
Nice story ! Thanks for sharing!
its nice story…..tyo storyko pidit afu nai bhaye jastai gari lekheko rahichau ….pidit bhaye pani nabhaye pani each and every feelings timile storymarfat dekhauna sakchham bhayeko chau … so congrat…
its a great story!!! i remembered those my twenties when i was in love with someone. i even did not meet her for long time. we started through pen pal and ended as good frens only. i was in love with her one sided i think but she also admited she feel in love with me for various reasons. it was not the love that new generation was thinking off anyway. this article is so deep and i make me feel that the writer was in love some one and had break up for some reason. OR may be the writer was in oneside love with guy who think girls are just a toy to play. and not faithful to any of them whom he played a drama of love though. anyway
i salute the skill of story writing of this writer.
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Have a nice day. Keep loving.